Ch05 Pg68

posted 21st Sep 2019, 9:49 AM

Ch05 Pg68
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21st Sep 2019, 9:49 AM

GeeTee

...And thats the end of this chapter. Hope you're enjoying it so far! :D

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As before, I'mma take a break. This time probably for a month. In the meantime, I will be updating this with bonus stuff, so keep an eye out.

Love you all <333

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21st Sep 2019, 10:20 AM

GIL

Now that's some reaction! Risa the fearless º_º

Great job on the chapter GT! Enjoy your break <3

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22nd Sep 2019, 12:46 PM

ShoShone

Pretty much like I said she'd do.

See, she asked who. Not what. Just like I said. Just like I got everything else right. But GeeTee cheated and snuck in a heart spark.

Amaranthe and Xandy are so stupid. All they had to do was be elsewhere right then. Which they could have done easy. And they wouldn't have been spotted.

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22nd Sep 2019, 1:14 PM

GeeTee

TBF, they had no reason to leave when Risa pulled back on the kiss. It would be pointless anyway, once the power transfer would happen, even if they left, Amaranthe can't stay too far away from Natsume for too long, and Xandria hangs around the school looking for love. They would be found out anyway. Its a better thing that they're found out in such an intimate environment.

Words words words, aaaand I can't give too much away, because story.

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22nd Sep 2019, 7:16 PM

ShoShone

Well, you still cheated!


TBF the practicality of what you say sounds okay. But then again Amaranthe could sneak up behind Risa when she's not looking and put upon her a succubus equivalent of a bell or something. Or when she's asleep. She could bug out whenever the Risa alert said she was getting too close. And they both saw when the heart spark happened. They should have poofed out then.

Then again Amaranthe pointed out how it means they're destined for each other. Hence, it may be better to go through the confrontation right away to work out some sort of understanding.

Oh, and nice touch with Natsume beinning to awake just as the confrontation begins, albeit, rather formulaic. Not so much, but sometimes the formula works out better. It's important to know when to ditch it and when to use it. You didn't have to do it that way. But you made a good choice.


I do vaguely recall Xandria saying something about hanging out for all the love in the air at the school. Now that you mention it. But I had forgotten and was thinking she popped in now and then solely for the purpose of hassling and checking up on Amaranthe and how she does with Natsume.

Which brings to mind another idea. But I could discuss that with you later.





And words words words, fine, you can't give the story away too soon. **pllegghhhhh**

damn it



Well, you could at least say something about teaching these girls to use their okeys so as they're not just SOL when they deplete their dokeys.

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23rd Sep 2019, 4:19 AM

ShoShone

You know, you make a yuri comic and it looks like a chapter will end on page sixty eight. You're supposed to stretch it out one more page and make it end on page sixty nine.

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